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不容否认，水平还可以
那个喜剧性角色也安排得挺好（可怜的老王）
所谓黑暗神兽的剧情挺有想象力
不过话说跟你原来写得不太一样吧？
Oh, say can you see by the dawn's early light
What so proudly we hailed at the twilight's last gleaming?
Whose broad stripes and bright stars thru the perilous fight,
O'er the ramparts we watched were so gallantly streaming?
And the rocket's red glare, the bombs bursting in air,
Gave proof thru the night that our flag was still there.
Oh, say does that star-spangled banner yet wave
O'er the land of the free and the home of the brave?
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